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Sentence of the Week #1

By Barbara Gastel | 24 August 2012

[From Michelle Yeoman:]

As mentioned in my previous post, each week this series will feature a new sentence that needs editing. Below is a sentence with 1 definite error: 

We studied how a transcription factor affect the inflammation response.

Please correct the error, and submit the corrected sentence and any remarks as a comment on this post. I plan to post and discuss the solution next week.

Do you have a sentence that you would like us to consider using as the Sentence of the Week? Please e-mail submissions to Michelle at msyeoman@gmail.com. Submissions should be your own work—don’t nominate a colleague’s writing :).

 

Sentence of the Wek #1

Posted by Abiodun Egbetokun at 24 August 2012 07:28 AM

The basic error in the sentence is in relation to the main verb. The verb 'affect' should have been in the form that agrees with the third person singular, i.e. 'affects' since the noun 'transition factor' is singular.

Thanks for this opportunity to practice some editing.

Sentence of the week 1

Posted by Baba Shehu Umar Ibn Abubakar at 24 August 2012 08:44 AM

The main verb should have conformed to the third person singular i.e "affaect' should read "affects".
Thank you

RE: Sentence of the Week #1

Posted by Enaruvbe G.O. at 24 August 2012 09:00 AM

I would rather phrase the sentence thus;

How a transcription factor affects the inflammation response was studied.

sentence of the week

Posted by ndejjo rawlance at 24 August 2012 12:09 PM

We studied how a transcription factor affects the inflammation response.

Sentence of the Week #1

Posted by Mohamed F. Abouel-Nour at 24 August 2012 12:45 PM

I think the sentence may be as follow:

"The effect of the transcription factor on the inflammation response has been studied".

sentence of the week

Posted by Robert Mulebeke at 25 August 2012 11:02 AM

The sentence seems to suggest that the study focuses on how the inflammation response behaves with differences in transcription factor.
The sentence also personalizes the study "we studied..."

I would therefore think the correct sentence would read " The effect of transcription factors on inflammation response was studied."

sentence of the week 1

Posted by Muna Abdo M El nemr at 26 August 2012 04:45 AM

The one definite error is that the verb affect should be written in the simple present tense (affects). But also i think that the sentence should be rephrased as ( this study tried to illustrate the effect of transcription factor on the inflammatory response).
Regards.